In 1001 there lived an evil witch called Zenia ,
she was known as the most evil witch that existed.
One day she was planning to make poison using steel, carrots, tearful eyes and mauve underwear.
The next day, there came a little girl called Emily who was dying because thirst.
Zenia was kind by giving Emily a cup of water but actually it wasn't water it was poison. Emily collapsed to the hard rock ground. A few hours later, there came another girl called Bella, she saw Emily lying on the ground, Bella tried to rescue her but it was..........................
6 comments:
I really like the sentence that says "In 1001 there lived an evil witch called Zenia ,she was known as the most evil witch that existed." because it give us lots of information.
I don't really understand the last sentence.
Cliff hanger endings are exciting!!
Your last sentence needs structuring with more punctuation.
I really like how you wrote about the girl but when you wirte
1001 try to say like 'in the year 1001'
Love the cliff hanger!! Great story by the way! Keep it up!
I LOVE the cliff hanger it really built up tension and I wanted to read the next part!
Leah
I like that you had a cliff hanger because it made your story make people want to read it.
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