I entered the kitchen. 'stomp stomp' something went.
Then I realized there was a chef entering the room behind me.
'Bonjour, je m'appelle Mario' said the chef. ¨I'm sorry I don't understand french.'' Oh it means hello my name is Mario in french'' he replied in a very french accent .
''Would you want some of my delicious Creme Brulee'' he ask."But I just couldn't eat something so slimy, disgusting and sticky when is supposed to be delicious" I said to my self. But I still tasted it. It turned out to be the best Creme Brulee I ever tasted.
8 comments:
I really liked the story line, very nicely written. :)
Great entry! Love how you added extra detail and French! Next time, watch out for your commas! :)
I really love how you wrote something in another language it makes it way more interesting.
I like the fact that you used French :)
I liked how you used another language, I also liked the moral of this story. To make your story better you could add more comma's and you could add more adjectives (but you do have a few good ones in your 100 WC already "slimy, disgusting and sticky")
I like how you used french in your writing because it is a effective thing in a story.The french really makes us want to read it.
I liked yours because it had humor but next time watch out for your tenses.
I liked how you used some french in your writing. Great job.
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