Hi, my name is Callie I am going on a journey to find a missing necklace from a museum, lucky I have a May to help me with this journey.As we were walking down town it was a sunny day, mean while May was thinking about how we are going to find the necklace, May shouted¨OH i know!¨
as the weather changed,we look up in the sky and it was cloudy we ran to a shelter and it starting to rain, I said ¨let´s do this another day, i think today is not a good day.
2 comments:
I like how you've made it a fiction story in the first person.
Keep it all in one consistent tense: "as the weather changed,we look up in the sky and it was cloudy we ran to a shelter and it starting to rain" uses several different tenses in the same sentence.
I with a capital letter please. Luckily not just lucky.Not a May but only May.
I think it is funny in the end of the story.
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