and my mom try to make a batter one but it not good it taste like a bad pizza but if i can't eat my mom food but the pizza is not good but either is good like stake and the chicken is good but the pizza is not good and i tell her it ok you are not good at everything and she side'it ok you are right' and i go to sleepy and good night bye
6 comments:
Batter or Better after this sentence "try to make a"
You need to use capital for i ,"I". Also capital letter at the start of the sentence. "Last night...".
You should start using "'s" (example: it's, mum's) and write the word correctly. Overall i like your story.
Also your telling a story you should use past tense.
I like your story and how it relates to real life. You need to remember to add a title and also, you need to have a capital I in your story. You should work on your spelling to.
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