Many of the problems could be fixed if there was vital equipment like oxygen masks, I.V drips, x-ray machines and heart monitors. I feel sad for the families because many of their babies die.
I started to raise money from all over the world. I've already collected enough money to buy some of the vital equipment.

I am so proud.
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Thank you for this piece Lisa, it is very powerful. I love how you have taken the character/perspective of a nurse there. It is very original and the effect for the reader is enhanced, especially with the use of photo.
Great use of grammar/punctuation/spelling. The final 'I am so proud.' is very strong.
My only suggestion would be to format this in the style of a letter (addressing it to Dr. Andrew and signing off with your name).
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