Wednesday, 22 February 2017

I cried with laughter

One beautiful and sunny day me and my younger brother Noah went to the majestic beach to make sand castles. A boy with a group of friends dug a wide and deep hole hoping that someone will fall in. As me and Noah were running side by side Noah fall in the hole and I laughed so hard that I cried. Suddenly karma struck me. I laughed too hard and fell in the hole with Noah. That day was never to forget so me and Noah kept on blowing our heads off with laughter when we kept thinking about it.

6 comments:

Anonymous said...

I really like the ending because it is relatable.

Mr Paul said...

Karma always catches up with you!!!

Careful with the past tense. "As me and Noah WERE running side by side Noah FELL in the hole and I LAUGHED so hard that I cried.

Anonymous said...

I really like your story

Ploy said...

I like your story it funny.

Fionaj said...

Nice story I really like it

Malou Jensen said...

Hi Valencia,
I really like that you told us the name of the beach.